Here is the Zinc's bio used for old SU stories:
p094.ezboard.com/fdmcmult...D=13.topic

AKA: MadNei, NND663, Damien C, Neimad, A993, Death293, D26436, NegaD, Sam Daze and Dbots
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DMC362 |
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Just being paranoid do you have Zinc's old SU bio. Unless I am crazy it seems you are channeling SU2 Zinc.Zinc's sword in the old bio was never called "Sword of Rune" and the glow of time necklace is green considering i never gave it a color per say in the old bio let's me know which bio you are looking at. These things do not affect the story and no need to edit them. But I wanted to confirm what bio you was looking at and help get on the right track it you may have got derailed.
Here is the Zinc's bio used for old SU stories: p094.ezboard.com/fdmcmult...D=13.topic ![]() AKA: MadNei, NND663, Damien C, Neimad, A993, Death293, D26436, NegaD, Sam Daze and Dbots |
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DMC362 |
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good story stealing hero from diffent time periods is a cool idea
would have been cool to see a rookie hero from the beging of SU see his war weary countpart near the end of the old SU stories. ![]() AKA: MadNei, NND663, Damien C, Neimad, A993, Death293, D26436, NegaD, Sam Daze and Dbots |
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Captain Avenger |
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So I guess in the next chapter we finally find out what the Entity wants with them? I hope so.
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IamtheRock3 |
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what no dogman
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Joe Chill |
The Visitor Revealed | ||
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[Limbo . . . ]
In the beginning, the world was without form, and void; and darkness was on the face of the deep. Zinc: Where are we? Captain Infinity: I dont know, son. Im igniting my entire body with cosmic energy, but I still cant see a thing. Zinc: Captain Infinity? Is that you? Captain Infinity: How do you know my name? Zinc: I just witnessed you . . . um, never mind. Are we the only ones here? Mari: Im with you, Zinc and Im also trying to generate light with my power, but its just not working. Captain Infinity: Whats your name, miss? Mari: You dont recognize me? Its Mari . . . Mari Hershing. Captain Infinity: This is all very strange. Everyone present, will you please announce yourselves? In reply, a light cuts through the darkness so brilliantly it forces Captain Infinity and the others to retreat to the safety of the shadows. Some are reduced to fetal positions to save themselves from permanent blindness, while others simply writhe in agony. The only ones seemingly unaffected are Angel and Metallion, who use this opportunity to confirm the presence of thirteen others beside themselves. The light emanates above them from a space in the shape of a door. Angel and Metallion watch as the contour of a figure emerges from the light, only to stop short of leaving the space. The only discernible trait is its wildly flowing golden hair that blends with the similarly colored light. An undetectable chorus intones: Shoooooom! The light changes to a purple hue. Chorus: Shoooooom! The light changes to green. Chorus: Shoooooom! The light turns blue, finally revealing and matching the color of the one and only Entity, as it bathes the entire environment in its monochromatic color scheme. Their sight restored, the metahumans look dumbfounded at the horizon stretching on without end and the starless sky above them. Other than an intermittent electro-magnetic discharge jolting between perceptible realities, the landscape wholly lacks character. However, that gradually changes with each passing moment, beginning with a carpet the doorway vomits down an invisible staircase. As the chorus returns, the blue light submits to the variety of wondrous colors found in Limbo Emany defying description, classification and human perception. Chorus: Here come old flattop . . . The doorway disappears in a puff of smoke and when it clears, the Entity, having traded his typical lab coat and sandals for a beatnik turtleneck sweater, sunglasses and leather shoes, begins snapping his finger to the rhythm of the music as he descends the staircase in an almost choreographed dance. Chorus: He come grooving up slowly . . . At the bottom of the staircase, the Entity spins, winding the carpet around him. When its nearly completely wrapped, it explodes in a display of confetti. Chorus: He got joo-joo eyeball . . . A pair of eyeballs slithers from behind Captain Infinitys shoulder and when he brushes it away, the Entity leaps backward into a balletic maneuver. Chorus: He one holy roller . . . He lands in Angels arms, now wearing a loincloth and assuming the image of Jesus held by Mary at the moment of his death. In disgust, Angel drops him, but a puff of smoke later and hes back on his feet, moonwalking in the direction of Fastball. Chorus: He got hair down to his knee . . . At the completion of his moonwalk, the Entity startles Fastball by sprouting so much hair it literally entwines him. Grasping blindly, Fastball tries to pull himself free of the hair and in the next moment finds himself pulling at his own head with the Entity standing beside him. Humiliated, Fastball tries to slip away, but the Entity grabs his waist and leads him in the Tango, ending with a dip. Leaning in for the kiss, the Entity puckers his lips, provoking Fastball to scream in a high-pitched soprano. Chorus: Got to be a joker, he just do what he please. The very ground quakes as a bizarre assortment of flora and fauna sprout from its base. In the distance, misshapen mountain peaks fall to earth, knocking the metahumans off their feet with each collision. Overhead, shooting stars streak across the sky. All the while, the Entity continues to dance. Wherever his feet touch, things that can only be described as trees, but hardly satisfying that classification, sprout in their place. Chorus: He wear no shoe shine, he got toe-jam football, he got monkey-finger, he shoot coca-cola . . . The Entity pauses in his dance to tie a rubber hose around his arm and injects himself with a syringe covered by the Pepsi label. When the Entity realizes his brand error, he blushes, disposes of the syringe and returns to his dance. Chorus: He say . . . The chorus resumes background vocals as a microphone appears in the Entitys hands. Entity: I know you . . . He points to the metahumans. Entity: You know me . . . He points to himself. Entity: One thing I can tell you is you got to be free! Come together. Right now. The chorus dies out, the microphone disappears and the Entity stares across the vast jungle at those hes abducted. His tone turns severe. Entity: Over me. Save for the crackle of energy throughout Limbo, all is silent. Entity: Get it? The first to speak is Michael, his eye still freshly removed from its socket. Michael: You fuckinEblue bastard! Michaels empty socket charges with pyrokinetic energy. Entity: Um, I wouldnt do that if . . . At the moment of release, bone shrapnel and flesh explode from his face. Michael: Aaaaaarrrrrrrrrgggggghhhhh! The Entity shrugs in response to Michael flailing about in agony, grasping his face with both hands. Alex Stevens, unfamiliar with Michael in his time period, tries to check the wound, but Michael pushes him away. Michael: . . . dont . . . touch me . . . His fingers peel from the coagulating blood on his face one by one to reveal the damage beneath. The entire right half of his face between his upper lip and brow is completely obliterated. An aura of psionic energy surrounds the portion of his brain visible through the hole. It seems to protect the exposed tissue from permanent damage and maintains regular blood flow. Michael makes certain the Entity sees this. Michael: God . . . God . . . I hate you . . . Entity: Everyone! Say hello to Michael Smith! Im sure youre all familiar with him, except our beloved Infinity Force. Alex Stevens: Just what do you think youve doing to this boy? Entity: Now, now, Alex. We both know children shouldnt play with fire. Unable to endure the pain, Michael falls into Alexs arms. Captain Infinity: Enough! Hold him steady, Alex. Im going to heal him. Entity: Ah-ah, my Captain. I like our friend just the way he is and if I wanted to keep my hands on their wrists, I wouldnt touch him. Captain Infinity: Are you threatening me? Entity: . . . Are you testing me? Captain Infinity steps away from Michael and Alex. Entity: Good boy. Captain Infinity: He needs medical attention. At least let Alex bandage him. Entity: Permission denied. Throwing his hands in the air, Captain Infinity turns to the others. Captain Infinity: Will you all stand for this? No one from the future time periods quite knows how to respond to this living legend until KnightHawk steps forward. KnightHawk: Captain, this boy laid waste to Los Angeles and nearly killed your entire team. While Im inclined toward equal representation, if the Entity outright killed him, Im certain the people in my time would rest easier. Michael: I didnt . . . uuhh . . . do anything to LA. I was talking with my girlfriend when this freak took me against my will. Im an innocent victim here! Alex: Relax or youll aggravate the wound. KnightHawk: Hes lying, Captain. Reports indicate he butchered his entire class. Captain Infinity: Thats beside the point. We cant make exceptions or were no better than he. Metallion: Forget the punk. I want to know one thing: when does the killing start? Having spent the debate filing his fingernails, it surprises the Entity to finally receive acknowledgement again. He throws the file aside and beams a wide grin at the whole lot. Entity: My dear, Metallion. I can always rely on you to cut straight to the point. Enough with introductions! Youll all become acquainted in due course. Lets chat about why Ive gathered you here in my wonderful world of Limbo. Everyone eyes the Entity warily. Entity: Cmon now, gather round! Dont be shy! In the next moment, a log cottage circa the 1800s American frontier, replaces the jungle setting. A snowstorm billows outside the window and a roaring fire maintains the heat within. The Entity sits in a leather easy chair with the metahumans gathered around him Indian-style on the floor. He puffs from a pipe and gurgles out bubbles instead of smoke. Entity: Now where was I? Oh yes! The reason Ive gatheredE KnightHawk: You want us to protect you. The Entity blows bubbles in KnightHawks face. Entity: Precisely. Pain-Man: Whered you come up with that cock and bull? KnightHawk: Its quite obvious really. Observing the Entitys anxiety reveals for once hes threatened by something he cant manipulate. Those hes abducted are an interesting selection in itself. We represent a combination of brains, power, leadership, and in your case, a strange comfort not unlike a childs blanket. Pain-Man: Hmph. KnightHawk: Beyond that, theres something about the number, but I cant place it yet. Entity: Congratulations, KnightHawk. Youve impressed me. KnightHawk: I was merely explaining the obvious to our unenlightened companion. No need for flattery. Following a long pause: Entity: You dont date much, do you? Captain Infinity: So weve established were here to protect you. What from? The environment changes once more, this time taking the form of a Roman gladiatorial coliseum. The metahumans stand together at the center of the open battlefield, while the Entity watches them from on high in the Emperors throne. The scorching sun beams down on the throngs of intergalactic species crammed tightly in the stands. In a similar throne directly across from the Entity sits the visitor. It is a being completely unfamiliar to everyone regardless of his or her time period. Captain Infinity: Just what is going on here? Entity: Captain, Im a cosmic being youve no doubt heard referred to as the Entity. My power exceeds that of the Lord of Heaven and knows no equal. For time immemorial Ive used that power to create countless experiments. Some like gravity, turned out swell, but others, like that lovable nincompoop Alabaster, not so good. That being over there was my first creation. I call it the Demiurge. The spectators squeal in delight at the mention of this name and the Demiurge quells their hysteria with the slightest gesture; then moves from beneath the canopy overhanging the throne and into the light. A grotesque secretion drips off its long, slithery body as it literally coils around itself in the same chaotic spasms as intestines unraveling from a slit open abdomen. Save for erratic bristles protruding from its otherwise naked flesh, it exhibits neither arms nor legs leading up its segmented body. The head resembles a lions, with the golden-colored mane flowing freely in the wind of the coliseum, yet its eyes are wholly human, completely blue, and mirroring exactly those of the Entitys. When it speaks, its fearsome fangs protrude from beneath its lips. Demiurge: Those who are about to die, behold those who would kill you. Two large doors at the far end of the battlefield creak open and from the opening emerges fifteen faces familiar to some, moreso to others. Both groups stare at each other with absolute astonishment at what is transpiring. For the longest time, the only noise is the movement of the spectators, until Angel steps forward; his eyes wide open in disbelief. Angel: Xerxes? (TO BE CONTINUED) |
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DMC362 |
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went old school with this one didn't you.
you just gave me a reasongo to the libary while i am gone ![]() AKA: MadNei, NND663, Damien C, Neimad, A993, Death293, D26436, NegaD, Sam Daze and Dbots |
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Joe Chill |
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Wish you'd stick around. We've got some DEADLY action coming up!
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Captain Avenger |
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Your writing KnightHawk pretty good.
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IamtheRock3 |
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oooo cool this the part when Angel and Xerxes finaly have sex.
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Not BAMF |
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Loving this.
Best SU story in a while. Nailing SU Entity. Couldn't imagine him done better. |
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JuggyFWB |
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Good scene indeed!
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"I cannot be caged. I cannot be controlled. Understand this as you die, ever pathetic, ever fools."---Jon Irenicus ~*~ If you happen to be standing around on Endor and an Ewok start's nuzzling against your leg and purring, the only proper response is to say "Get away from me, you sick monkey FREAK." And then start poking it with a sharp stick. ~*~ |
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Airess Byrd |
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Nice, nice. This is starting to get really good
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MIMIC82 |
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I finally got to reading this me liky alot.
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A mimic is any species that has evolved to appear similar to another successful species in order to dupe predators into avoiding the mimic, or dupe prey into approaching the mimic. A mimic generally resembles its target in one or more of the following: appearance, behavior, and habitat. The capacity to mimic is sometimes called "mimetism." Mimetism differs from camouflage in that the mimic doesn't try to blend with the surroundings, but to appear as some other creature. |
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Joe Chill |
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At nearly fifteen feet in height, the red-skinned daemon towers over the fourteen beings grouped around him. His leathery wings spread wide at the mention of his name and a coarse snarl bellows past his up-curled lip. Sheathed twin katana swords rest easily within reach against his hips.
Xerxes: Brother . . . Blue flames explode from their sheathes as Xerxes draws a sword in each hand. His lips pull back to reveal three-inch long fangs and a growl more ferocious than any beast on earth announces his intent. Mari Hershing, a friend and lover of Xerxes in her time period, intercedes. Mari: Xerxes! Whats gotten into you? Xerxes: Out of my way, lady! With one flap of his wings, Xerxes propels himself forward at such amazing speed that Mari barely has time to erect a force field to protect her and Angel. Without stopping, Xerxes ascends and dive-bombs past it, swords extended to decapitate his brother. Angel draws his sword, but it never connects with the katanas. Two blasts of incredible power send Xerxes plummeting into the dust, where smoke rises from his still body. Shaken by her lovers attack, Mari looks in the direction of the blasts and is relieved to see a young Native American-East Asian girl in a white leotard with a fireball emblem on its chest. Her long black hair whips wildly from the force channeled from her clenched fist. Beside her stands another girl of about the same age. Angel peers at her carefully and observes a slight resemblance. Much like her companion, her entire body throbs with unbridled fire, but aside from her claws and the hint of fangs, she appears entirely angelic. Fiery wings even sprout form her back like magma spewed from the mouth of a volcano. Mari: Purefire, what are you doing here? Purefire: I couldnt let him hurt you or dad. Purefire rushes past Mari into the opposing crowd, where she throws her arms around Castfire and holds him close. Castfire blushes and tries to unlock her arms. Castfire: Um, hi there, miss. We havent even met! She lets go and looks at him with doe-like eyes. Purefire: Dont you know me? Castfire recognizes the hurt in the girls face, but not her identity. His hollow gaze tells her everything. Mari: Shes your daughter, Castfire. Castfire: My what? I dont even have a girlfriend! Angel: If shes his daughter, then whos that? Angel points to the girl with the fiery wings, only theyve now withdrawn into her back along with the rest of the flames. Entity: That would be your daughter, Angel. Isnt this a wonderful family reunion? Why, I even see my little one over there! Hi, Al, hows it hanging? In an oversized Scooby-Doo t-shirt, shorts and slippers, Alabaster looks quite out of place amongst the more elaborately dressed companions abducted by the Demiurge. Along with Angel and Castfires children, and the felled Wish-Demon, Xerxes, Alabaster shares the battlefield with a number of others. Prime among them is the villainous Time Master, wrapped in his flowing blue cape and masked by a metallic helmet. Flanking him on one side is the android Symphony and his mechanical dogs Lyric, Sharp and Bass, while on the other is the madwoman Glass, her translucent body mimicking her name. Behind them stands the bounty hunter, Kyre, with his mystical blades sheathed in leather straps that run across his bared battle-scarred chest, and the mercenary Pyrus from the organization called the Unseen, covered completely by black leather that conceals his identity. Stranger still is the ten-foot tall behemoth composed entirely of rock known as the Golem and the emaciated Mexican cannibal Function, his nakedness covered only by his grotesque growth of facial hair. In the rear, the skittish African-American hero Nutzoid, and the tall, lean Asian villain the Thin Man, finely dressed in a designer suit, keep to themselves. The remaining players are the rocklike Midtown, an up-and-coming criminal rival of Pain-Man in the New York City underworld, and the sultry Black Mage known as Hecate, with her voluptuous form outlined in a skintight dress. Like Kyre and Xerxes, she too wields twin swords: Oathkeeper and Oblivion. Alabaster: Huh? Entity: You never were a bright boy. The Entity rubs his chin, intermittently nodding as he surveys the metahumans. Then he looks to the Demiurge. Entity: I presume Als inclusion is your idea of a joke? At this point, Xerxes finally stirs and after shaking the cobwebs from his head, he looks around for his attackers and settles on Angels daughter. No longer engulfed by fire, she appears as a harmless sixteen year-old girl with only her blonde locks to conceal her nakedness. Xerxes ignites his katanas and charges her. Angel moves to intercept his brother, but his daughter calmly raises her hand to stop him. In the next instant, Xerxes is upon her, only she thrusts her other hand between his blades, grabs his armor and as the katanas glance off her shoulders, she lunges toward his neck and rips it clean open with her fangs. Xerxes drops his swords and falls to his knees, grasping at the wound and gurgling blood. It only takes a moment for him to heal, but even then, his skull caves in from the impact of the girls fist. His body goes limp and the girl raises her fist to deliver the killing blow, but Angel gently lowers it. This all occurs so quickly that everyone watching barely has time to register. The crowd observing the bloodletting cant get enough. Entity: Whoo! Demiurge, you picked a powerful one there. Better watch out though, lest she slaughters her own teammates. Angel: Entity! If this girl is indeed my daughter why does no one seem to recognize her? Entity: Im sure some of them do but what they remember is little Lucy about yea big. The Entity holds his hands two feet apart. Angel: Lucy . . . Entity: She calls herself Lucifer these days. Angel: And whos the mother? Entity: Hoo-hah! As much as Id enjoy delivering that exposition, Ill leave you to discuss it with your daughter, that is, if you both survive. Xerxes skull finally heals itself, but rather than continue his attack, he gathers his swords and keeps his distance from Lucifer. She stares at him from eyes that betray no emotion. Captain Infinity: Enough with the games, Entity! Entity: Games, Captain? Games, you say? You might call this the ultimate game. Only its so much more. Just then, a realization occurs to KnightHawk. KnightHawk: Thats it! This is a game. Literally. Time Master: What nonsense is this fool talking about? KnightHawk: Think about it the numbers. Thirty of us are gathered here today. Were participants in an elaborate game of chess! Time Master: But there are thirty-two pieces in chess. KnightHawk: Thats right the Entity and the Demiurge are the two remaining pieces. Thats why the Entity seeks our protection. He must be the King and the Demiurge the same. How could I not have seen this before? Entity: Because youre a dumb-dumb. Did you really think this is just a silly chess game? Of course not! Im the Entity! Give me a little more credit! Our pal over there, the Demiurge, he challenged me, and being a good sport, I devised something so unique so Machiavellian as to turn the Marquis De Sade in his grave. Heres the deal: since Im not as careless as some cosmic beings to create children more powerful than I, the Demiurge is simply outmatched. It knows it, I know it, and hence the game. To even the playing field, Ive agreed to renounce my omniscience, omnipresence and omnipotence so now Im just as vulnerable as everyone else. This game will end when either I or the Demiurge is dead. Demiurge: Declare your pieces. Every head in the coliseum turns toward the Demiurge. It waits patiently for the Entity to respond. Entity: For his courageousness and versatility, Captain Infinity will be my Queen. For their defensive capabilities, Angel and Metallion will be my Rooks. For their intelligence and wisdom, KnightHawk and Eternal will be my Bishops. For their unpredictable power, Michael Smith and Alex Stevens will be my Knights. Mari Hershing, Fastball, Zinc, Ageless One, Landslyde, Castfire, Pain-Man, and Expert are my Pawns. Pain-Man: Im no ones pawn! The crime lords complaint goes unnoticed when the Demiurge declares his pieces: Demiurge: My Queen is Time Master. My Rooks are Xerxes and the Golem. My Bishops are Kyre and Symphony. My Knights are Lucifer and Function. Pyrus, Nutzoid, Alabaster, Hecate, Glass, Midtown, Thin Man, and Purefire are my pawns. Captain Infinity: Wait a second! Why should any of us agree to protect either of you? Demiurge: You have no choice, as you will come to understand. Entity: Oh boy! Im excited! Are you ready, Demiurge? Demiurge: Pawn Purefire to square A-4 . . . Purefire: Dad, help me* Castfire: Purefire!!!!!! Purefire disappears from the coliseum. Entity: Pawn Fastball to square B-5 . . . Like Purefire, Fastball disappears. Captain Infinity: Stop this! Whatever youre doing! Stop this now! Demiurge: Pawn Purefire takes Pawn Fastball . . . (TO BE CONTINUED) |
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Joe Chill |
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If anyone can figure out how this ends, I'll pay you $100. Not even Bamf knows quite what will happen. Shh!
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Captain Avenger |
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Hey Joe, you ever play an old computer game called Archon?
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DMC362 |
Re: Let the game begin | ||
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nice
![]() AKA: MadNei, NND663, Damien C, Neimad, A993, Death293, D26436, NegaD, Sam Daze and Dbots |
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Not BAMF |
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I know enough that I still love this story.
Eager to see the rest. |
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JuggyFWB |
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This is very awesome!
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"I cannot be caged. I cannot be controlled. Understand this as you die, ever pathetic, ever fools."---Jon Irenicus ~*~ If you happen to be standing around on Endor and an Ewok start's nuzzling against your leg and purring, the only proper response is to say "Get away from me, you sick monkey FREAK." And then start poking it with a sharp stick. ~*~ |
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Joe Chill |
For everyone's reference | ||
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Here's a chart I've constructed to indicate the time period each character comes from. Stories are abbreviated as such: Long Live the Immortal Race (LLtIR), Michael vs. Society (MvS), Knights, Age of Syn (AoS), Dash Rapid - Episode I (DREI), Kyre I, Shattered, Born a Bastard (BaB), and Coming of Relanez (Relanez). Those characters from time periods between stories are listed as such. Those characters post-Relanez are a mixture from present SU and the future.
LLtIR Captain Infinity Eternal Angel Alex Stevens Castfire Landslyde Expert MvS Michael Smith B/W MvS & Knights Unseen Pyrus Knights KnightHawk B/W Knights & AoS Xerxes AoS Golem Function DREI Glass Kyre I Kyre Shattered Alabaster Nutzoid BaB Pain-Man Relanez Ageless One Mari Hershing Fastball Zinc Metallion Present/Future Symphony Thin Man Time Master Lucy Hecate Midtown Purefire Obviously Infinity Force would have less knowledge than those in the future time periods and those in the future would have more knowledge than those behind them. Please be aware of this while reading the story. I hope this helped. |
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